use the ideas in the document plus your new ideas to make this document a 6 page… is like you are revising the paper… the student says it is a revision..,
teachers comments: Over all the paper was missing a lot of detail… Also, page 3 information need to be taken out. the teacher feels that ages and locations are not important to the argument.
argue both sides of the question
a good hook/intro
paragraph 2 (Context) needs definitions of “deployments” and “divorce”